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GED Sample Essay

25th September 2008

GED Sample Essay

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Hi, again! I’ve got another student essay for everyone to look at…. this is one I really liked. It’s got a pretty good structure, and what’s really good is that it uses examples from life. That’s the best thing… to put in real-life things that happened to you.

The problem this essay has is grammar… and it also mentions a study, but it doesn’t give any details about it. Now, you won’t be able to look up anything while taking the GED…so just do your best! It’s really better to rely on your own experiences than a study or data. They don’t expect you to have a lot of facts and data at your fingertips. My suggestions are in ALL CAPS in the essay….

Despite laws that require people to wear seat belts, many people still do not wear them.I wonder if that forcing seat belts laws people will have trust in them from injury. [THE STRUCTURE OF THE FIRST SENTENCE IS A LITTLE OFF. THIS WOULD BE BETTER: I WONDER IF FORCING PEOPLE BY LAW TO WEAR SEAT BELTS WILL CAUSE PEOPLE TO TRUST THEM.] When I got [IN] my first accident [THE] seat belt did not protect me from injury. The injury resulted [FROM] a head on collision in which my head hit the windshield and I cracked it. I was so nervous, intense, and surprise[D] [GOOD WORDS!] that the seat-belt  did not protect me from injuring my forehead. I always trusted the seat-belt until this day.

People say seat-belt[S] [NO HYPEN IN SEAT BELT] protect anyone from flying out of the windshield but from my experience not all injuries. Especially, if there is a accident and your vehicle is on flames. Would [A] seat-belt [NO HYPHEN] give you a chance to survive while unbuckling it? I have seen on television when a person is trying to unbuckle while exiting [A] vehicle and died as a result from smoke inhalations. Accidents can occur within seconds and seat-belts [NO HYPEN] uses [USE...OR EVEN BETTER "ROB YOU OF TIME TO GET OUT"] some of the time to get out from it ["FROM IT" ISN'T NEEDED] during a fire.

According to different [YOU CAN JUST SAY "A SURVEY..." 'DIFFERENT' SEEMS TO SAY YOU'VE ALREADY TALKED ABOUT ANOTHER SURVEY] survey seat-belts [NO HYPHENS] only can protect eighty percent [OF] lives while the other thirty [TWENTY? IT'S EITHER 80/20 OR 70/30... 80+30=110% OF PEOPLE] is at risk from other injuries. My advice is anyone who is making a decision to drive should use methods to avoid accidents such as good judgment and precaution towards their surrounding. [EXCELLENT!]

And just maybe anyone can reduce the chance for a accident by one hundred
percent. [FANTASTIC CONCLUSION! LEAVES YOU WITH SOMETHING TO THINK ABOUT.]

Do you have a different opinion on this topic? Try writing your own GED essay for practice.

For more information about the GED test and GED test preparation, visit The GED Academy at http://www.passGED.com.

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  1. 1 On October 7th, 2008, ged math test : ged practice test : ged test : ged : ged study guide : ged test score : ged writing test said:

    [...] brings you another sample student essay to read… can you do a better practice [...]

    posted on October 7th, 2008 at 9:56 am

  2. 2 On February 26th, 2009, michelle said:

    i amgetting ready to take the ged test and i am worried about the essay part of it . i was hoping that there is something out there that would be of more help tome . If there is can you please email it to me or even mail it to my house thank you

    posted on February 26th, 2009 at 5:09 pm

  3. 3 On February 27th, 2009, Liz said:

    Michelle, The ebook GED Smart has a complete section that teaches you a lot about the essay. You can find it here: http://www.passged.com/e-book.php … it’s an ebook you download right onto your computer, so you can have it right away. If you’re enrolled in the GED Academy, you already have the book… just log in to your account online and go to “Start Here” to find the link.

    posted on February 27th, 2009 at 8:57 am

  4. 4 On March 31st, 2009, hubs said:

    K thanks mom

    posted on March 31st, 2009 at 12:54 pm

  5. 5 On January 14th, 2010, Mandy said:

    im going to go take my GED test again tomorrow, i only have to do the writting part and social studies. When i write any kind of paper, i write as if i was talking to the person face to face. i dont mean to but i guess a cant grasp that i have to make it sound “pro.” if you can write me back in my email to help me out alittle bit that would be AWESOME..

    posted on January 14th, 2010 at 7:24 pm

  6. 6 On January 15th, 2010, Liz said:

    Mandy,

    When you’re writing an essay, try to think of three different answers, or three different parts to one answer. Then remember to format it like this:

    Introduction to the answer (don’t just state your answers here. .

    Answer 1

    Answer 2

    Answer 3

    Conclusion you’ve come to from your answers.

    When you’re writing your essay, also be very aware of words such as, “like,” “you know,” “ok,” and “anyway.” These are filler words that we use in conversation that don’t need to be in a formal essay. If you keep your sentences direct in to the point and follow the above format, it should help you to sound more “pro.” Good luck!

    posted on January 15th, 2010 at 9:10 am

  7. 7 On June 16th, 2010, gedsoon said:

    This helps alot

    posted on June 16th, 2010 at 10:08 am

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