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Sample GED Essay

25th August 2008

Sample GED Essay

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Hi everyone! I hope that your GED essays are going well… I’ve got another sample student essay for you, and I think this one is a pretty good example. I think the writer really tied the question to his own experience and did a good job telling the story, and that’s something that’s real important on the GED.

The one thing that I think this needs is a stronger conclusion. What general thing… philosophical idea… big thought… can you tie it to? What does it tell you about the world in general? What did you learn about human nature or the world from this experience? If you had something to add at the end that said… “I learned how dependent people’s safety and feelings are on the world around us, and so I realized that helping make a better environment is really helping people.” Or something like that. That’s just an example. But if there’s something like that at the end, it would really tie the whole thing together.

The essay still has a few grammar problems, but they’re not too big a deal. I mean, there aren’t too many, and they don’t interfere with me understanding the essay, and that’s the most important thing. The organization is there, and the story is there. I’ve marked in ALL CAPS some grammar things to be aware of in the essay below.

See if you can make improve this essay… and try to write one of your own on the same topic!

Topic: How does the climate in your region affect you and the other people who live there?

Dry temperatures and no rain affected people and I around central Florida. As of result no rain, [MISSING SUBJECT...YOU COULD ADD 'THE WEATHER' HERE, OR CHANGE THE SENTENCE TO SAY 'A LACK OF RAIN BROUGHT...'] brought forest fires and dry air. this [NEEDS CAPITAL T IN 'THIS'] situation occurred during pollen season. Two months ago, in reference to dry temperatures, a forest fires occurred and I got depressed, agitated, and worried. This forest fire occurred only (forty-minutes distant drive) ['A FORTY-FIVE MINUTE DRIVE'] from where I live.According to the weather forecast the fire was spreading very rapidly because [OF] lack of rain and dry temperatures. [THE] Weather forecast also informed [US] that there would not be any rain for the rest of the week.

During this incident which was during pollen season and dry air brought breathing complications. [YOU CAN DELETE 'DURING' AND 'WHICH'...'THIS INCIDENT WAS DURING POLLEN SEASON...'] We had all these complications from the dry weather
climate.

If I were to go and make an er ran [ERRAND] people were either depressed or angry. A lot of confusion and caos [CHAOS] resulted because no one knew who or what provoked these forest fires.

I feared for myself and neighbors while this was going on. This dry weather lasted for a month, until it finally rain. [RAINED]

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  1. 1 On September 11th, 2008, reneee said:

    can u help me on my ged test can u send me some ged test

    posted on September 11th, 2008 at 9:21 am

  2. 2 On June 16th, 2009, Bradley said:

    Dry temperatures and no rain affected people and I around central Florida. As of result no rain, [MISSING SUBJECT...YOU COULD ADD 'THE WEATHER' HERE, OR CHANGE THE SENTENCE TO SAY 'A LACK OF RAIN BROUGHT...'] brought forest fires and dry air. this [NEEDS CAPITAL T IN 'THIS'] situation occurred during pollen season. Two months ago, in reference to dry temperatures, a forest fires (TAKE THE “S” OUT OF FIRES) occurred and I got depressed, agitated, and worried. This forest fire occurred only (forty-minutes distant drive) ['A FORTY-FIVE MINUTE DRIVE'] from where I live.(NEEDS TO DOUBLE SPACE AFTER THE SENTENCE)According to the weather forecast the fire was spreading very rapidly because [OF][THE]lack of rain and dry temperatures. [THE](WEATHER SHOULD HAVE A LOWER CASE W) Weather forecast also informed [US] that there would not be any rain for the rest of the week.

    During this incident which was during pollen season and dry air brought breathing complications. [YOU CAN DELETE 'DURING' AND 'WHICH'...'THIS INCIDENT WAS DURING POLLEN SEASON...'] We had all these complications from the dry weather
    climate.

    If I were to go and make (SHOULD SAY “RUN” OR “COMPLETE”) an er ran [ERRAND] people were either depressed or angry. A lot of confusion and caos [CHAOS] resulted because no one knew who or what provoked these forest fires.

    I feared for myself and neighbors while this was going on. This dry weather lasted for a month, until it finally rain. [RAINED]

    posted on June 16th, 2009 at 5:19 pm

  3. 3 On July 14th, 2009, Nichole said:

    I thought you werent supposed to say I in an Essay?

    posted on July 14th, 2009 at 11:43 am

  4. 4 On July 29th, 2009, Leandro said:

    Can you hel me by giving me some feed back on my essay?
    And if it was to be marked, what would be my score?
    Thank you
    leorose575@hotmail.com
    What does it take to be a good parent?

    What defines a good parent? Are you a good parent? Do your kids see you as a good parent? When is one ready to become a parent, If anyone is indeed, ever ready, If one is already a parent, hot does one change to be A Good Parent?

    What defines a good parent? That is one of those questions that if you asked a 100 different people, you would get 100 different answers. And you would be surprised on how these answers may differ among age groups, don’t believe me? Ask a kid. Kids have a totally different perception of what a good parent is, than adults do.

    Everyone who had a childhood has thought of becoming a parent or acted as one at least once throughout their childhood. Remember playing house with your sister and/or friends? Starring Barbie, as the lovely mother/wife and Ken as the father; who leaves home to work after breakfast, giving Mom and the baby doll a kiss? Or perhaps you remember telling yourself that once you were grown, you would be the coolest dad ever; letting your kids play as long as they wanted, buying them all the toys they wished for and most importantly: Never force them to finish their vegetables!
    Now, You might not be the coolest parent in the world, but you sure are the most concerned about your child’s future, health and safety. So does every parent (I Hope), but guess what? That is not enough in your child’s point of view.

    Many people believe that, as parents, their role is to: provide food, shelter and the opportunities for a good education to their children, a few realize that kids are not mature enough to understand or appreciate all their parents provide. As I teacher I have heard many kids saying they wish daddy would quit his job and come home to play with them; Now isn’t that ironic, that parents have to scarify spending quality time with their children so that they have a better life?

    Some young couples wishing to have kids ask themselves: are we ready to become a parent? Well if I could answer that question I would say: NO, you’re not and you will never be, unless you can predict your child’s whole life before it is even born. The reason for that is: no matter how much money you have saved, or the amount of baby clothing you have bought, or the number of classes you have taken on parenting, you are never ready for such a demanding life change.
    But don’t panic, unlike many jobs that require lots of experience, you can always learn on the go, and but the time you have your second or third child you will be one step closer to becoming a “Good Parent”
    If you are already a parent, and yet don’t think you can be classified as one of the best there is, You can always learn from your mistakes and make the necessary changes, it can’t be that difficult, in case you don’t know how to change your parenting style, why don’t just stick to Mom and Dad’s pattern? It can’t be that bad, if it worked for you it surely will work for your kids and you can always use your own innovations and leave out what you didn’t really like about the way your parents raised you.

    In the end, no one is really a great parent in everyone’s eyes, your ability to cope with the changes that will happen in your life and the understanding of your children needs as they grow once you become a parent is what makes you a good parent.
    Leandro Soares

    posted on July 29th, 2009 at 11:06 pm

  5. 5 On January 23rd, 2010, Shantell said:

    My name is Shantell.I am a 20 year old student graduating from the Westchester school for special Chidren,a non public day program for student with academic delays.Next year I will be graduating from school and I preparing to take the GeD test. I was wondering if you could teach me how to to write a perfect Ged eassy please.

    posted on January 23rd, 2010 at 11:31 am

  6. 6 On April 22nd, 2010, leka montgomery said:

    Hi, My name is Leka. I have a set date in June to take the GED test. I am studing like crazy, doing a lot of research. Its very challenging for me, to put together a perfect essay. I really need some extra help to prepare a scoring essay. I greatly appreciate your feedback.
    THanks so much!!

    posted on April 22nd, 2010 at 6:48 am

  7. 7 On April 22nd, 2010, Liz said:

    Hi Leka,

    Writing a good essay sure is hard work. Is there anything that you’re specifically having troubles with?

    posted on April 22nd, 2010 at 7:33 am

  8. 8 On June 16th, 2010, lesly said:

    I need to take my writting test ( essay ) for the second time, and i still don’t get it.
    please can anyone help me

    posted on June 16th, 2010 at 5:27 pm

  9. 9 On August 6th, 2010, Brittany said:

    Im haveing trouble knowing when to stop my paragraphs and also knowing how many parahraphs should be used in an essay? If you could give me any tips it would help out alot

    thanks

    posted on August 6th, 2010 at 7:35 pm

  10. 10 On August 9th, 2010, Liz said:

    Hi Brittany,

    Typically, an essay should have four to five paragraphs. The first paragraph should be an introduction to the whole essay. The middle ones should each be a single idea about your topic, and the last one should be a conclusion. So, for example, if the question were, “What do you think about global warming?” You might have your paragraphs set up like:

    1. Global warming is a serious problem because…
    2. Glaciers are disappearing.
    3. Extreme Weather.
    4. Sea Levels Rising.
    5. In conclusion, these things show that…

    If you’re having trouble knowing when to stop a paragraph, it might be because you don’t have a clear idea about what your paragraph should be about. Make a list like this to describe your paragraph structure, and then maybe even make another list for each paragraph, explaining what you want to talk about in that paragraph. When you’ve said all you can say about that topic, you’re done with the paragraph.

    posted on August 9th, 2010 at 7:35 am

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